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What is your favorite game which is commonly played in Korea? Explain why.

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I think that commonly played in korea games are LOL, Overwatch. before i did it but now i can't do it because that's ID owner is my ex-boyfriend.
so, recently I'm doing mostly Overcooked and Stardew Valley. if you play The Overcooked with friends you can experience restaurant job. It is make me ecstasy At the same time feeling angry. The Stardew Vally is farm work game. you can feel relax in the village.

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What is your favorite game which is commonly played in Korea? Explain why.

I think that commonly played in korea games are LOL, Overwatch.
>>> I think LOL and Overwatch are the games commonly played in Korea these days. 

before i did it but now i can't do it because that's ID owner is my ex-boyfriend.
>>> I used to play it but now I cannot because I used the ID of my ex-boyfriend in playing those games. 

so, recently I'm doing mostly Overcooked and Stardew Valley.
>>> Recently, I'm playing Overcooked and Stardew Valley. 

if you play The Overcooked with friends you can experience restaurant job. 
>>> If you play Overcooked with friends, you'll experience working in a restaurant. 

It is make me ecstasy At the same time feeling angry. 
>>> It makes me feel ecstasy at the same time I feel angry.

The Stardew Vally is farm work game. you can feel relax in the village.
>>> Stardew Valley is a farm game so you will feel relaxed in the village while laying it. 
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