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I usually pick up the first work that is also important that day.
and deciding to order from important work to less important work is very important to me
because you would process many work or something you have how plan you have every day and every week

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Hey, Jin. Your grammar is improving and I have to say I appreciate the effort you put into this homework. Well done! I just tweaked some of the sentences. Thank you once again and have a good night. ~Teacher Jane c",)


well I always try to manage a everyday for not to wast time
>> Well, I always try to manage not to waste time every day.

I usually pick up the first work that is also important that day.
>> I usually pick up the first work that is also the most important of that day.

and deciding to order from important work to less important work is very important to me
>> And deciding to put in order the most important work to the less important work is very important to me.

because you would process many work or something you have how plan you have every day and every week
>> Because if you would do a lot of work or something you have to plan every day and every week.
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