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While traveling, I usually use internet to search in advance for interesting places to visit. As I like to plan out for traveling, I search for good restaurants and beautiful sites to make daily route. The best function of internet is that it contains the latest information and honest comments of other travelers. Searching on the internet is sometimes regarded as burden because it feels like I should be perfect for the traveling. Furthermore, there are much false information and advertisements that only shows positive and good parts of the place. However, if I filter information and compare thoroughly, I can save money and time by following the most efficient route and successfully visit the best places. Also, I can check other's review on restaurants or historical sites on the internet and revise the schedule immediately. Therefore, I try to arrange my travel schedule by using the internet.

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While traveling, I usually use internet to search in advance for interesting places to visit. 
>> Correct!
Or: ...the internet to search...

As I like to plan out for traveling, I search for good restaurants and beautiful sites to make daily route. 
>> Correct!
Or: ...a daily route.

The best function of internet is that it contains the latest information and honest comments of other travelers. 
>> Correct!

Searching on the internet is sometimes regarded as burden because it feels like I should be perfect for the traveling. 
>> Searching on the internet is sometimes regarded as a burden because it feels like I should be perfect for traveling. 

Furthermore, there are much false information and advertisements that only shows positive and good parts of the place. 
>> Correct!
Or: only show

However, if I filter information and compare thoroughly, I can save money and time by following the most efficient route and successfully visit the best places. 
>>  Correct!

Also, I can check other's review on restaurants or historical sites on the internet and revise the schedule immediately. 
>> Correct!

Therefore, I try to arrange my travel schedule by using the internet.
>> Correct!
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