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Why first impressions are important

작성자: 조*아
2021-01-22 409

회원님의 영작문

Many people insist that first impressions are important. I agree with their opinion. I'd like to tell you why it is true.
If you meet someone for the first time, you don't have enough information to judge him. Therefore, you cannot help judging him with his first impression.
It is really hard to break your prejudices. Therefore, a lot of people are judged by their first impressions for a long time. For example, if you think 'he is so kind,' when you meet him for the first time, you won't change your judgment easily even though he gives an attitude afterward. In a word, first impressions become bias, and it won't change in a short time.
Many people try to give a good first impression when they have a job interview or go on a blind date. It shows that first impressions are important. Why don't you make efforts to give a better impression when you meet someone for the first time?

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Well said, Mina! You were not just able to explain it vividly but you supported your stand by providing examples, as well! Nice! - Faith-
Many people insist that first impressions are important.
>> CORRECT
I agree with their opinion.
>> CORRECT
OR: I must say that we have the same belief.
I'd like to tell you why it is true.
>> CORRECT
OR: Let me point out why it is true.
If you meet someone for the first time, you don't have enough information to judge him. 
>> CORRECT
Therefore, you cannot help judging him with his first impression.
>> Therefore, you cannot help judging him with your first impression of him.
It is really hard to break your prejudices. 
>> CORRECT
For example, if you think 'he is so kind,' when you meet him for the first time, you won't change your judgment easily even though he gives an attitude afterward. 
>> For example, if you think he is so kind when you meet him for the first time, you won't change your judgment easily even though he shows a bad attitude afterward. 
In a word, first impressions become bias, and it won't change in a short time.
>>CORRECT
Many people try to give a good first impression when they have a job interview or go on a blind date. It shows that first impressions are important. 
>> Many people try to make a good first impression when they have a job interview or go on a blind date.
It shows that first impressions are important. 
>> CORRECT
OR: It suggests the relevance of first impressions.
Why don't you make efforts to give a better impression when you meet someone for the first time?
>> Why don't you make efforts to make a better impression when you meet someone for the first time?
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