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Dinosaur was in a past. Dinosaur was very strong and always hungry. The famous dinosaur was tyrannosaurus. Mabye a lot of people know the tyrannosaurus. Tyrannosaurus is very scary, but very kind too, because sometimes he catch one dinosaur, and give it to other friends. My younger brother loves tyrannosaurus too, because it is a king of a dinosaur. Dinosaur appeared before two thousand million ago. A lot of people say, "Dinosaur appeared because of Big Bang", "No, The Jesus creatured a dinosaur", so this mean there was a dinosaur in a past.

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Happy weekend Maria!

There were so many evidences that dinosaurs existed in the past. I believe in them too. It is just so sad that we can no longer see them today because of their extinction. If they still survive today then probably, they will eat some of us. 

Thank you once again for sharing these ideas through your composition. I really appreciate all of your great efforts. Keep it up always!

See you soon.

T. Donna =)

Dinosaur was in a past. Dinosaur was very strong and always hungry. The famous dinosaur was tyrannosaurus. 
>> Dinosaurs were in the past. Dinosaurs were very strong and always hungry. A famous dinosaur is a tyrannosaurus. 

Mabye a lot of people know the tyrannosaurus. Tyrannosaurus is very scary, but very kind too, because sometimes he catch one dinosaur, and give it to other friends. 
>> Maybe a lot of people know the tyrannosaurus. Tyrannosaurus is very scary, but very kind too, because sometimes he catch one dinosaur, and give it to another friend. 

My younger brother loves tyrannosaurus too, because it is a king of a dinosaur. 
>> My younger brother loves tyrannosaurus too, because it is the king of all dinosaurs. 

Dinosaur appeared before two thousand million ago. 
>> Dinosaurs appeared before two million years ago.

A lot of people say, "Dinosaur appeared because of Big Bang", "No, The Jesus creatured a dinosaur", so this mean there was a dinosaur in a past.
>> A lot of people said, "Dinosaurs appeared because of Big Bang". Some people said Jesus created dinosaurs. So this means there were dinosaurs in the past.
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