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At what age do people usually begin to work in your country?

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It varies from person to person.
someone starts work since 10 years old.
they usually starts job is youtube Platform. and actor.
and the other person so late start work 30 years old.

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Here are my corrections for you:


It varies from person to person.

>> CORRECT!

OR

>> It depends, it's a case-to-case basis.
someone starts work since 10 years old.

>> Someone may start working at 10 years old.
they usually starts job is youtube Platform. and actor.

>> They usually start working in YouTube or work as an actor.
and the other person so late start work 30 years old.

>> Other people may start working late at around the age of 30.

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