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visiting museums to learn about a country.

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Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel other country. However, I disagree with this idea for two reasons. First of all, museums are too costly, usually the costs are around 20 dollars. For example, when I traveled New York city in the U.S, visited several famous museums including Modern Art Museum, it costs almost 100 dollars. had not visited that museums, I could have stayed better hotel . Secondly, I can't mingle with local people. Although we can lean some historical culture from museum, we can't interact with local people while we are visiting a museum. For my experience, I prefer lean culture interacting with local residents. That is how I am. In this regard, people don't have to visit museums to learn about culture of a country they travel.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi May,
Thank you so much for today's homework!
Have an awesome morning and talk to you later!
Teacher ELLY.
visiting museums to learn about a country.
>>Visiting museums in order to learn about a country.
Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel other country.
>>Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel to that place.
However, I disagree with this idea for two reasons. 
CORRECT!
or>>But, I am in disagreement with this particular idea because of two things. 
First of all, museums are too costly, usually the costs are around 20 dollars. 
>>First of all, museums are too costly. Usually the cost is often around 20 dollars. 
For example, when I traveled New York city in the U.S, visited several famous museums including Modern Art Museum, it costs almost 100 dollars. 
>>For example, when I traveled to New York city in the U.S, I visited several famous museums including the Modern Art Museum, which costs almost 100 dollars. 
had not visited that museums, I could have stayed better hotel . 
>>Had I not visited those museums, I could have stayed in a much better hotel. 
Secondly, I can't mingle with local people. 
>>Secondly, I can't mingle with the local people. 
Although we can lean some historical culture from museum, we can't interact with local people while we are visiting a museum. 
>>Although, we can lean some historical cultures from the museums, we can't interact with the local people while we are visiting them. 
For my experience, I prefer lean culture interacting with local residents. 
>>For my own experience, I prefer to learn the culture by interacting with the local residents. 
That is how I am. 
CORRECT!
>>This is my nature.
In this regard, people don't have to visit museums to learn about culture of a country they travel.
>>In this regard, people don't have to visit museums in order to learn about the culture of a country they are traveling.
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