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Beacuse older people and young people have different think.
Young people sometimes find it difficult to understand what older people think.
And I do, too.
We should try to accept each others thoughts because the times are different.
We also need to understand to changes according to the times.

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Hi there EDEN~! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework smartly. I appreciate your essay ideas. Keep writing and keep learning.^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
Beacuse older people and young people have different think.
>>> Because older people and young people have different minds.
Young people sometimes find it difficult to understand what older people think.
>>> CORRECT
And I do, too.
>>> I also experience the same. 
We should try to accept each others thoughts because the times are different.
>>> CORRECT
We also need to understand the changes according to the times.
>>> CORRECT

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