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I can play a lot of instrument. I can play a drum, a piano, a flut, and a cello. My favorite instrument is drum, and I can play a cello the best. Actually, if I good at one of the instrument, I feel very exciting, and good, but I doesn't good at this, I feel sad and annoyance. I can play cello the best, but not good at it, so I get scold sometimes to my cello teacher. Then I sick of it, because I get scold every lesson. The solution is this: If you want to good at this instrument, you have to practice very hardly. This is right answer, because if I practice very hardly, I begining to good at this instrument, and I feel very exicting. This mean no matter how I feel sad, and annoyance of this, it's okay, if you practice more hardly you can change your mind to excting, and good.

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Hi Maria!

I agree with what you have said. Your mind is the limit. If you want to achieve, you can do it!

So thanks for achieving another composition this time. I really appreciate all of your efforts and thoughts on your writing always.

See you!

-T. Donna =)

I can play a lot of instrument. I can play a drum, a piano, a flut, and a cello. My favorite instrument is drum, and I can play a cello the best. 

>> 
I can play a lot of instruments. I can play the drums, piano,  flute, and a cello. My favorite instrument is the drums, and I can play the cello the best. 

Actually, if I good at one of the instrument, I feel very exciting, and good, but I doesn't good at this, I feel sad and annoyance. 
>> Actually, if I'm good at one of the instruments, I feel very excited and good, but if I'm not good at something, I feel sad and annoyed. 

I can play cello the best, but not good at it, so I get scold sometimes to my cello teacher. Then I sick of it, because I get scold every lesson. 
>> I can play  the cello the best, but if I'm not good at it, I get scolded sometimes by my cello teacher. Then I get sick of it because I get scolded every lesson. 

The solution is this: If you want to good at this instrument, you have to practice very hardly. 
>> The solution is this: If you want to be good at an instrument, you have to practice very hard. 

This is right answer, because if I practice very hardly, I begining to good at this instrument, and I feel very exicting. 
>> This is the right answer, because if I practice very hard, I begin to  be good at this instrument, and I feel very excited. 

This mean no matter how I feel sad, and annoyance of this, it's okay, if you practice more hardly you can change your mind to excting, and good.
>> This means no matter how I feel sad, and annoyed of this, it's okay, if you practice more hardly you can change your mind to be excited and be good at it.
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