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What is you favorite public transport and why?

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There are various public transports in the world.
In my country, I prefer using subway to get to my destination. Because, subway usually comes at the right time.
For example, Seoul has a heavy traffic.
If I go to somewhere using bus or taxi in rushhour, I might take much linger time to get there.
There is one thing more that I prefer subway.
Subway in Korea affords free wi-fi to passengers, in which people spend a boring time doing aomething such as watching You-tube or chatting their friends.
But in rushhour subway will be changed to hell.
If I only avoid that time, I can benefir many things from subway.

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Hello once again Young Won!

The subway is cheap and reliable therefore during off peak time. Nonetheless, it is still one of the best forms of transportation because it is highly accessible and provides entertainment to its passengers.

I thank you for taking time to do this task. Keep writing and honing your grammar, great job!

-T. Donna =)

There are various public transports in the world.
>> Correct!

In my country, I prefer using subway to get to my destination. Because, subway usually comes at the right time.
>> Correct!
Or: In my country, I prefer using the subway to get to my destination because it usually comes at the right time.

For example, Seoul has a heavy traffic.
>> Correct!

If I go to somewhere using bus or taxi in rushhour, I might take much linger time to get there.
>> If I go somewhere using the bus or taxi during the rush hour, I might take much longer to get there.

There is one thing more that I prefer subway.
>> There is one thing more that I prefer than the subway.

Subway in Korea affords free wi-fi to passengers, in which people spend a boring time doing aomething such as watching You-tube or chatting their friends.
>>Subways in Korea provide free wi-fi to passengers in which people spend their boring time doing something such as watching You Tube or chatting with their friends.

But in rushhour subway will be changed to hell.
>>But during the rush hour, the subway turns to hell.

If I only avoid that time, I can benefir many things from subway.
>> If I can only avoid it that time, I can benefit from many things away from the subway.
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