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I agree to a certain extent.
If there were no laws and rules, it would be world of crime.
Also, I think the laws and rules were created because the were many crimes.
Individual free is important, but only within laws and rules.
Never get out of it.
But laws and rules should never violate human rights.

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Great day EDEN! Thank you for always trying to converse with me effectively. And your essays, they are commendable! Keep it up! Have a good day!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree to a certain extent.
>>> CORRECT
If there were no laws and rules, it would be world of crime.
>>> If there were no laws and rules, the world will be full of crimes.
Also, I think the laws and rules were created because there were many crimes.
>>> CORRECT
Individual free is important, but only within laws and rules.
>>> Individual's freedom is important, but only within laws and rules.
Never get out of it.
>>> CORRECT
But laws and rules should never violate human rights.
>>> CORRECT


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