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I think it is negative development.
People seem to value their current lives and them without saving.
It is good for now, but it is not good for old age.
If they get older, you can't earn the money so they have to live with the money they have saved.
If they don't have to money save, their old age will be unhappy.
So they have to save money from now.

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I think it is a negative development.
>>> CORRECT
People seem to value their current lives and them without saving.
>>> People seem to value their current lives without saving.
It is good for now, but it is not good for old age.
>>> It is good for now, but it is not good for the old age.
If they get older, you can't earn the money so they have to live with the money they have saved.
>>> If they get older, they can't earn money so they have to live with the money they have saved.
If they don't have to money save, their old age will be unhappy.
>>> If they don't have saved money, their old age will be unhappy.
So they have to save money from now.
>>> CORRECT


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