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We have to clean our teeeth very clearly

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Some people brush there teeth at very short time. This is very not good at our health. I got a class that learned brushing teeth when covid19 wasn't here. We have to brushing our teeth over 2minutes, also I brush my teeth over 3minutes. If we don't brush our teeth very well, our mouth are became sick, and sometimes teeth became sick too. On friday, I will go to the dental clinc, after that I will brush my teeth very well!

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Hi Maria!

Having the perfect smile and the best shiny white teeth is a must when you are a very friendly person. After all, you will always have to talk and make people comfortable and happy with your speech. I wish that you will have a good time at the clinic on Friday.

Here on this composition, you had only very few mistakes. Take time to look at them closely.

I would like to thank you for a job well done always.

Take care.

-T. Donna =)

Some people brush there teeth at very short time. This is very not good at our health. 
>> Some people brush their teeth at very a very short time. This is not  very good for our health. 

I got a class that learned brushing teeth when covid19 wasn't here. 
>> I had a class and learned brushing teeth before Covid-19. 

We have to brushing our teeth over 2minutes, also I brush my teeth over 3minutes. 
>> We have to brush our teeth for over 2minutes. Also, I brush my teeth over 3minutes. 

If we don't brush our teeth very well, our mouth are became sick, and sometimes teeth became sick too. 
>> If we don't brush our teeth very well, our mouth will become sick and sometimes our teeth will became sick too. 

On friday, I will go to the dental clinc, after that I will brush my teeth very well!
>> On Friday, I will go to the dental clinic. After that,  I will brush my teeth very well!
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