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(HW) What disease frightens you the most? Why?

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It is cancer that frightens me the most.
There are many cancers without symptoms in the early stage of cancer. So it is difficult to predict cancer.
And it's hard to treat cancer. To treat cancer, we have to use strong medicines and do a lot of tests.
Despite these treatments, we can't be sure that cancers can be cured.

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Hello Gloria, 
First of all, I am sorry for being absent in your class because I was sick. I missed talking with you, and thank you for this homework. 
It is cancer that frightens me the most.
>> correct
>> OR: I am scared the most of cancer.
There are many cancers without symptoms in the early stage of cancer. So it is difficult to predict cancer.
>> correct
>> OR: There are many cancers that don't show symptom in the early stage, so it is difficult to predict if it is cancer. 
And it's hard to treat cancer. To treat cancer, we have to use strong medicines and do a lot of tests.
>> correct (awesome way of writing the sentences)
Despite these treatments, we can't be sure that cancers can be cured.
>> correct
>> OR: Despite the availability of various treatments, we cannot be rest assured that cancers can be treated. 
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