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20 years ago, When I heard diet, I thought that diet is skipping a meal. Eating nothing is diet. My sibling had the same idea about diet.
But, It was totally wrong. According to doctors who are expert about diet, If I skip a meal, my body thinks that need to save energy for sometime of skipping meals. If I have three meals next day, the energy will be fat. Everyday, If I skip a meal to end of my life, It can help me to lose weight. For example, If I skip a dinner, I have to skip all dinners of my life. Can you do this? So, to skip a meal can't be a good diet. Although I lose weight by this way, that way is easy to happen yoyo phenomenon.

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DIET 

20 years ago, When I heard diet, I thought that diet is skipping a meal.
>>> CORRECT

Eating nothing is diet. My sibling had the same idea about diet.
>>> I thought that eating nothing is diet. My sibling had the same idea about diet.

But, It was totally wrong. According to doctors who are expert about diet, If I skip a meal, my body thinks that need to save energy for sometime of skipping meals. 
>>> But, it was totally wrong. According to doctors who are experts about diet, if I skip a meal, my body thinks that it needs to save energy for some time of skipping meals. 

If I have three meals next day, the energy will be fat.
>>> If I have three meals the next day, the energy will turn into fat. 

Everyday, If I skip a meal to end of my life, It can help me to lose weight.
>>> Every day, if I skip a meal until the end of my life, then it can help me to lose weight. 

For example, If I skip a dinner, I have to skip all dinners of my life. 
>>> For example, if I skip dinner, I have to skip all dinners of my life. 

Can you do this? So, to skip a meal can't be a good diet. 
>>> Can you do this? So, skipping a meal can't be a good diet if you can keep it all the time. 

Although I lose weight by this way, that way is easy to happen yoyo phenomenon.
>>> Although I lose weight by using this way, this happens rarely or it's a phenomenon.

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