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I agree to certain extent.
These day, people watch the news on the Internet instead of newspapers.
Also search on the Internet instead of magazines and they read e-books instead of paperbooks.
As it goes on, newspapers, paper books will disappear.
But it can't go away.
Because, they are traditional things that have been around since our ancestors.
Therefore, it is good to solve everything through the Internet, but sometimes it would be good to use traditional methods.

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Hi there Eden~! ^^ I'm really sorry about what happened today. Anyway, I hope to see you on Monday~! ^^ Thank you for doing your best in your essays! Keep improving!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
I agree to certain extent.
>>> I agree to a certain extent.
These day, people watch the news on the Internet instead of newspapers.
>>> These days, people watch the news on the internet instead of reading newspapers.
Also search on the Internet instead of magazines and they read e-books instead of paperbooks.
>>> Also, they search on the internet instead of magazines and they read e-books instead of paper books.
As it goes on, newspapers, paper books will disappear.
>>> As it goes on, newspapers, paper books might disappear.
But it can't go away.
>>> CORRECT
Because, they are traditional things that have been around since our ancestors.
>>> Because, they are traditional things which have been around since our ancestors.
Therefore, it is good to solve everything through the internet, but sometimes it would be good to use traditional methods.
>>> CORRECT

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