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Adults,especially parents,think
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Hello, Lucia!
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Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Like what I've mention last time, proper punctuation is important when writing paragraphs.
Let's discuss this in class on Monday.
See you then!

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Adults,especially parents,think
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