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Can you think of any examples of people who are rich and miserable?

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I don't know any examples of people who are rich and miserable. But I read a book about it. There was a man who succeded. But there was no one near him. His family was all died because he didn't care of them.

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Here's your edited homework, Kai!
Enjoy your weekend!

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I don't know any examples of people who are rich and miserable. But I read a book about it.
>> correct

There was a man who succeeded. 
>> or: There was a successful man. 

But there was no one near him. 
>> But he wasn't close to anyone or he had no close friends. 

His family was all died because he didn't care of them.
>> His family died because he didn't care about them.
>> or: Everyone in his family passed away because he didn't take care of them. 

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