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Hi Jean! I am glad to write this again! Here's my homework!!


I think it is not that good. Because Christmas is good for now too, and I don't wanna make holidays became one.
The reason that I don't wanna make holidays become one is each holidays have each characteristic, and each characteristic of holidays is fun and great. And if it becomes one, we will unable to find each characteristic of holidays.

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Here's your edited homework, Bella! 
Speak soon!

Cheers, 
Jean~~


I think it is not that good. Because Christmas is good for now too, and I don't wanna make holidays became one.
>> I think it is not a good idea because Christmas is good for now too, and I don't want to make holidays become one.

The reason that I don't wanna make holidays become one is each holidays have each characteristic, and each characteristic of holidays is fun and great.
>> The reason why I don't want to make holidays become one is each holiday has its own characteristic, and each characteristic is fun and great.

 And if it becomes one, we will unable to find each characteristic of holidays.
>>  And if they became one, we would be unable to find the individual characteristics of the holidays.
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