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Do you save in the bank? If yes, how do you do it?

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I save money in bank!
First, I bring my money to bank.
Second, I count the money, and put it into machine.
It will save the money!

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Hello Jamie,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



Do you save in the bank? If yes, how do you do it?

I save money in bank!
>>> CORRECT

First, I bring my money to bank.
>>> CORRECT

Second, I count the money, and put it into machine.
>>> Second, I count my money  and put it in the machine.  

It will save the money!
>>> It will save my money. 
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