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My favorite season

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My favorite season is fall.
This is because, I don't like not only too hot weather but also too cold weather.
To be specific, the weather of the autumn has very calm weather rather than summer or winter.
As for spring, it is warm and calm, too. But, I like cool weather more than warm weather.
So, Fall is my favorite season.

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Hello Sunny!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

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Here are my corrections for you:


My favorite season is fall.

>> CORRECT!
This is because, I don't like not only too hot weather but also too cold weather.

>> This is because, I don't like only a weather that is too hot but I also don't like a weather that is too cold.
To be specific, the weather of the autumn has very calm weather rather than summer or winter.

>> To be specific, the weather of autumn has a very calm weather unlike summer or winter.
As for spring, it is warm and calm, too. But, I like cool weather more than warm weather.

>> As for spring, it is warm and calm too, but I like a cool weather more than a warm weather.
So, Fall is my favorite season.

>> So fall is my favorite season.

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