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Many people say Korean likes doing something quickly. Many Korean people hate waiting. (Me too.)
It is the same when we use public transportation. When we feel uncomfortable while we are using public transportation. We must get rid of it. Improving public transportation can be a good election pledge. When I visited Germany 3 years ago, I booked a hotel outside of city. But, I didn't have a way to go to the hotel in the evening. A cab was the way to go to the hotel. As you know, taking a cab is the most expensive public transportation. Many countries have good public transportation system. But, They have time limit.
Before COVID-19, one of my friend spent time with me and he went back home 1 am by a bus.

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Hello Kim Il Hwan,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

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Many people say Korean likes doing something quickly.
>>> Many people say Koreans like doing something quickly. 

Many Korean people hate waiting. (Me too.)
>>> Many Korean people hate waiting that includes me.

It is the same when we use public transportation. When we feel uncomfortable while we are using public transportation.
>>> It is the same when we use public transportation; we feel uncomfortable while using and waiting for long lines.

We must get rid of it. Improving public transportation can be a good election pledge. 
>>> CORRECT

When I visited Germany 3 years ago, I booked a hotel outside of city. 
>>> When I visited Germany 3 years ago, I booked a hotel outside the city. 

But, I didn't have a way to go to the hotel in the evening. A cab was the way to go to the hotel. 
>>> But, I don't know how to go back to the hotel in the evening. A cab was the way to go back to the hotel. 

As you know, taking a cab is the most expensive public transportation. 
>>> CORRECT

Many countries have good public transportation system. But, They have time limit.
>>> Many countries have good public transportation systems. But, They have time limits.

Before COVID-19, one of my friend spent time with me and he went back home 1 am by a bus.
>>> Before COVID-19, one of my friends spent time with me and he went back home at 1 am by bus.

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