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What are some ways we can help homeless people?

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First, we can search for a fund that helps homeless people and send some money to the fund. In the street, I sometimes see a desk and posters that promote lives of homeless people. We can spend some time there looking into it and sign for the fund if we are willing to support financially.
Second, we can volunteer for homeless people. In my church, there is an organization that provides free food and groceries to homeless people twice a week. I think joining that kind of voluntary work could be helpful.
I think the ways I wrote could be indirect which could be done through a fund or an organization. It's because we barely have chance to meet the homeless people in person. I think the most important thing is that we should have interests on it and behave when we have opportunities to help them.

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Hi, Kylie! ^^
Thank you for giving your opinion on this topic. 
It's touching to know that your church helps the homeless. It is really inspiring~

- T. Rina


1. First, we can search for a fund that helps homeless people and send some money to the fund. 
>> CORRECT!

2. In the street, I sometimes see a desk and posters that promote lives of homeless people. 
>> On the street, I sometimes see a desk and some posters that promote the lives of homeless people.

3. We can spend some time there looking into it and sign for the fund if we are willing to support financially.
>> We can spend some time there looking into it and sign for the fund if we are willing to support them financially.

4. Second, we can volunteer for homeless people. 
>> CORRECT!

5. In my church, there is an organization that provides free food and groceries to homeless people twice a week. 
>> CORRECT!

6. I think joining that kind of voluntary work could be helpful.
>> CORRECT!

7. I think the ways I wrote could be indirect which could be done through a fund or an organization. 
>> CORRECT!

8. It's because we barely have chance to meet the homeless people in person. 
>> It's because we barely have a chance to meet homeless people in person.

9. I think the most important thing is that we should have interests on it and behave when we have opportunities to help them.
>> I think the most important thing is that we should have interests and act on it when we have opportunities to help them.
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