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The busiest city in my area

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I think the busiest city in my area is Seo-myeon.
This is because there are lots of restaurants and some places where people hang out with friends.
So, everytime I go to this place, people are always crowded in this city and I usually watch them very busy.
I don't prefer going to this area, because I love feelings of comfortable and calm.

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Hi there Sunny! 

It's great to see you here on the composition site.

Some people enjoy being in a crowd and taking part of it while others shy away from it and enjoy the comfort of calmness as you do.

They say that as we grow older, we are more attuned to quietness and solitude. So if you enjoy these, you are getting more matured.

Thanks for sending me this to read and to suggest some grammar patters to.

I must say you write short, correct, and very meaningful sentences. Keep up the good work!

See you in class!

-T. Donna =) 

I think the busiest city in my area is Seo-myeon.
>> Correct!

This is because there are lots of restaurants and some places where people hang out with friends.
>> Correct!

So, everytime I go to this place, people are always crowded in this city and I usually watch them very busy.
>> Correct!
Or: every time

I don't prefer going to this area, because I love feelings of comfortable and calm.
>> I don't prefer going to this area because I love feelings of being comfortable and calmness.
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