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I know that we can't help but acknowledge the legal retirement age.
But I think that the age we can work is until we die.
Of course we must retire at the appropriate age for the younger generation in an organized society.
Because it will help social development.
I personally want to work until I die.
Of course that doesn't mean doing anything to make money.
That's what I serve and devote to for the people who need help.

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Hello, Eun Ha. Good job on the homework. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts on the topic and for making an effort. It was well worth it. Have a good night. ~Teacher Jane c",)


I know that we can't help but acknowledge the legal retirement age.
>> CORRECT =)

But I think that the age we can work is until we die.
>> CORRECT =)

Of course we must retire at the appropriate age for the younger generation in an organized society.
>> Of course, we must retire at the appropriate age for the younger generation in an organized society.

Because it will help social development.
>> CORRECT =)

I personally want to work until I die.
>> CORRECT =)

Of course that doesn't mean doing anything to make money.
>> Of course, that doesn't mean doing anything to make money.

That's what I serve and devote to for the people who need help.
>> CORRECT =)

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