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How do you keep the spark in your marriage aftrr a very long time?

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I got married when I was 24 years old and my husband was 29 years old. We were so young that we had many troubles at the begining of marriage. My husband and I have a totally different character. Besides, when I pregnant a second child, my son, he just got a work in China. He had to stay half of month in China while he worked with chinese company. This period was continuing for almost 5 years.
During that time, I had to give up many things what I could expect from my husband. I coped with nurturing two kids alone. There were several crisis in marriage. Evry time, when I was exhausted, my kids gave me energy qnd comforted me. Fortunately, my husband realize now how I was strugling during that time. We are turning over 17 years in marriage. There is no spark anymore, love what we say love, changed to trust.
I think that trust is more strongthan love. Sometimes my husband get me angry but I trust that he returns and try to cover his faults.

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Hi Young Won!

Trust is the key word and the foundation of a relationship that is built to last. Once trust is gone, all the love and respect is gone. I am glad to know that you have built that trust together for 17 years and more in the coming future.

Sacrifice as well is one that coincides with trust as there can never be trust when one cannot sacrifice.

These two things are what you have encapsulated on your essay. 

Thank you for sharing these, they are so much appreciated.

Catch you soon!

-T. Donna =)

I got married when I was 24 years old and my husband was 29 years old. We were so young that we had many troubles at the begining of marriage. 
>> Correct! 
Or: ...at the beginning of our marriage.

My husband and I have a totally different character. Besides, when I pregnant a second child, my son, he just got a work in China. 
>>My husband and I have a totally different characters. Besides, when I got pregnant with our second child (my son) he just got a work in China. 

He had to stay half of month in China while he worked with chinese company. This period was continuing for almost 5 years.
>> He had to stay half of month a month in China while he worked with a Chinese company. This period continued for almost 5 years.

During that time, I had to give up many things what I could expect from my husband. I coped with nurturing two kids alone. 
>> During that time, I had to give up many things I expect from my husband. I coped with nurturing our two kids alone. 

There were several crisis in marriage. Evry time, when I was exhausted, my kids gave me energy qnd comforted me. 
>> Correct!
Or: SPELLING: every, and

Fortunately, my husband realize now how I was strugling during that time. We are turning over 17 years in marriage. 
>> Fortunately, my husband realized now how I was struggling during that time. We are turning over 17 years in marriage this year. 

There is no spark anymore, love what we say love, changed to trust.
>> Correct!

I think that trust is more strongthan love. Sometimes my husband get me angry but I trust that he returns and try to cover his faults.
>> I think that trust is stronger than love. Sometimes my husband makes me angry but I trust that he will return and try to cover his faults.
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