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About One day being celebrity/star

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Basically, I dnt wanna be a celebrity Not even one day.
People think celebrities very attractive position,
But it is misleading made via social media only showing bright side of them.
I used to consider same way when I was young.
But I'm old enough to know a distinction of showing and truth.
The most important thing is not how they show me, it is how I show me
It is called self-esteem

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Hello there, Christian!
(^___^)
Happy Friday!

Thank you so much for accomplishing your homework.
I respect your opinion about the life of celebrities. I also believe that it's not always full of glitz and glamor.
They're humans, too. They have their own struggles.
Celebrity or not, if you love what you're doing then it'll eventually make you happy. :)

__T. Mayleen ^^,)


Basically, I dnt wanna be a celebrity Not even one day.
>>> Basically, I don't want to be a celebrity not even for a day.
People think celebrities very attractive position,
>>> People think that being a celebrity is an attractive job/occupation/situation.
But it is misleading made via social media only showing bright side of them.
>>> However, I think it's misleading because they only show their bright side on social media.
I used to consider same way when I was young.
>>> I used to think that way when I was young.
But I'm old enough to know a distinction of showing and truth.
>>> Now, I'm old enough to know to distinguish what true and what's not.
The most important thing is not how they show me, it is how I show me
>>> The most important thing is not how they see me, but it's how I show myself to them.
It is called self-esteem
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: It is called self-esteem.
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