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Hi Claire!

Nice work today! Your composition was great! Let's save all the animal lives that we can. See you next week! ^^

~~Teacher Kate


We can start respecting animals from small things. For example, giving food to abandoned animals.

>>We can start respecting animals in small ways. For example, giving food to abandoned animals.

There are lots of abandoned animals on the street. 

>>CORRECT!

We can often see stray cats or stray dogs wandering around with hunger and their hopeless situation.

>>CORRECT!

Or we can donate to a company that protects animals. 

>>CORRECT!

We don't need a lot of money. We may pay them in limited money that we can handle.

 >>We don't need a lot of money. We may pay them with limited money that we can handle.

Animals have the rights to drink clear water, eat healthy food, and be harmonized with people and nature.

>>CORRECT!

But now, some animals are having rights. They are usually pets. 

>>CORRECT!

They treated almost the same as people.

>>They  are treated almost the same as people.

Compare wild animals and animals living with humans. 

>>CORRECT!

They are different.

>>CORRECT!

Almost comparing sky and land. 

>>It's almost like comparing the sky and land. 

Everyone knows about wild animals living in a poor environment.

>>CORRECT!

But no one tries to help them. They must treat the same.

>>But no one tries to help them. They must be treated the same.

If people change many parts of Earth, then they have responsibility for many lives that living with us.

>>If people change many parts of the Earth, then they have the responsibility for many lives that live with us.

There is no more hope if we delay solving this major problem.

>>CORRECT!

Our little beautiful mind might save a poor animal's life.

>>Our beautiful minds might save a poor animal's life.

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