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Do you think children learn bad habits at school or at home? How?

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I think children can be learned bad habits from their parents or teachers. in a survey, children just accept what they see and children can do follow what their parents do or teachers. for example, if parents are fighting and yelling at each other in front of their children, their kids would do that in other situatuion

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This composition is well done. ^^ 
Thank  you so much! You did really well.
And I also agree with what you said. 
Which is why everyone should be careful of what they say and do. :)


~t. Ally


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I think children can be learned bad habits from their parents or teachers. in a survey, children just accept what they see and children can do follow what their parents do or teachers. for example, if parents are fighting and yelling at each other in front of their children, their kids would do that in other situatuion
>> I think children can learn bad habits from both their parents or teachers. In a survey, it said that children just accept what they see and that children can follow what their parents or teachers do. For example,  if parents fight and yell at each other in front of their children, their kids would do the same thing.
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