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I extent agree.
If they do what they want to do, the laws and rules will be unnecessary.
Sometimes laws and rules violate human right.
But laws and rules are essential in society.
If they don't keep it, society will be ruined.
If they let if free, we become a society of looting and crime.
Therwfore they muat obey the laws and rules.

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Hi there Eden! Happy Holiday to you! Thanks for sharing you ideas today! Enjoy the time with your family!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I extent agree.
>>> I agree to a certain extent. 
If they do what they want to do, the laws and rules will be unnecessary.
>>> CORRECT
Sometimes laws and rules violate human right.
>>> Sometimes laws and rules violate human rights.
But laws and rules are essential in society.
>>> CORRECT
If they don't keep it, society will be ruined.
>>> CORRECT
If they let if free, we become a society of looting and crime.
>>> If they let if free, we become a society of loosing and crime.
Therwfore they muat obey the laws and rules.
>>> Therefore, they must obey the laws and rules.
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