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What are the benefits of collecting?

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If we do collecting, we might have some benefits.
We become more interested in the objects while we do collecting.
If we collect foreign coins, we will have more interested in in coins when we travel.
Also collecting will help emotionally to us.

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Hi Lily,
Thank you for your ideas today!
Have a good morning and talk to you later!
Teacher Elly.
What are the benefits of collecting?
If we do collecting, we might have some benefits.
>>If we start collecting, we might enjoy some benefits.
We become more interested in the objects while we do collecting.
>>We become more interested in the objects while we start collecting.
If we collect foreign coins, we will have more interested in in coins when we travel.
>>If we collect foreign coins, we will become more interested in coins when we travel.
Also collecting will help emotionally to us.
>>Also, collecting will help us emotionally.
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