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It is negative development.
As rhey get older, they get wrinkles on their face.
As wrinkles form, they look older.
Then, of course, people want to look younger.
People go to cosmetic surgery to look young.
They grt Botox, they goet plastic surgery.
Then it costs a lot of moneu, and it can look unnatural.
It can also wrong during surgery.
I think it is better to accept it because it is only natural that changes happen when you get older.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It is negative development.
>>> It is a negative development.
As rhey get older, they get wrinkles on their face.
>>> As they get older, they get wrinkles on their face.
As wrinkles form, they look older.
>>> CORRECT
Then, of course, people want to look younger.
>>> CORRECT
People go to cosmetic surgery to look young.
>>> CORRECT
They grt Botox, they goet plastic surgery.
>>> They get Botox and plastic surgery.
Then it costs a lot of moneu, and it can look unnatural.
>>> Then it costs them a lot of money, and they look unnatural.
It can also wrong during surgery.
>>> The surgery could also fail. 
I think it is better to accept it because it is only natural that changes happen when you get older.
>>> I think it is better to accept it because it is only natural changes which happens when you get older.



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