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If you can live in a different planet, what would you pick and why?
-> If I can live in a different planet, I'll pick Mars.
If we are so far from the sun, It will be very very cold.
If we are so near to the sun, It will be very very hot.
And Mars has similar environments as Earth.
So if I can live in a different planet, I'll pick Mars.

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If I can live in a different planet, I'll pick Mars.
>>CORRECT

If we are so far from the sun, It will be very very cold.
>>If we are so far from the sun, it will be very cold.

If we are so near to the sun, It will be very very hot.
>>If we are so near to the sun, it will be very hot.

And Mars has similar environments as Earth.
>> Mars has a similar environment as Earth, 

So if I can live in a different planet, I'll pick Mars.
>> CORRECT
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