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humans ruled by their emotion

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2021-02-18 1022

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I think humans are easily affected by their emotion.
Because I have experienced that if I had a good event, I would not be likely to get angry well.
And their is a Freud's theory which demonstrates that Human's brain consists of unconscious , conscious and the id.
They balanced together and choose between their contact point.

Also, there are many books regarding ways to control my feelings.
If someone isn't affected by one's feeling, we are good at everything we do.
Nowadays, I also fight with my feelings or emotions like regret, laziness and anger etc..

I heard that if someone has self-control ability , he or she will be good at one another.
I'll practice the skill to control my emotions and I'll overcome..!

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Thank you Juliet!
~Lucy

I think humans are easily affected by their emotion.
>>CORRECT!
Because I have experienced that if I had a good event, I would not be likely to get angry well.
>>CORRECT!
And their is a Freud's theory which demonstrates that Human's brain consists of unconscious , conscious and the id.
>>CORRECT!
They balanced together and choose between their contact point.
>>CORRECT!
Also, there are many books regarding ways to control my feelings.
>>CORRECT!
If someone isn't affected by one's feeling, we are good at everything we do.
>>CORRECT!
Nowadays, I also fight with my feelings or emotions like regret, laziness and anger etc..
>>CORRECT!
I heard that if someone has self-control ability , he or she will be good at one another.
>>CORRECT!
I'll practice the skill to control my emotions and I'll overcome..!
>>CORRECT!
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