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I wanted to be an adult as quickly as possible when I was a student because there were a lot of limitation to do something. I was not stronger than adults and I couldn't make money by myself. Children tend to make their decision as their parents direct. I thought that if I became an adults, there were nothing I can't do. However, I have been exhausted as getting older because I had worries which I had to solve every moments. I realized that being an adult didn't make me happy and I have regretted to my life time in teenagers. In regard to the physical appearance, human usually looks ugly as getting old. Nobody want to be ugly so many people try to keep their skin, body shape by doing exercise and so on. Some people go to the hospital to maintain their appearance. On the other hand, people work out for their healthy life and can get benefit from it. We can see some people who work out a lot and look younger than their same age people. I think that it has a lot of positive aspects w

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I wanted to be an adult as quickly as possible when I was a student because there were a lot of limitation to do something. 
>>> I wanted to be an adult as quickly as possible when I was a student because there were a lot of limitations to do something. 
I was not stronger than adults and I couldn't make money by myself.
>>> I was not strong like adults and I couldn't make money by myself.
 Children tend to make their decision as their parents direct.
>>>  Children tend to make their decision as their parents direct them.
 I thought that if I became an adults, there were nothing I can't do.
>>>  I thought that if I became an adult, there's nothing I can't do.
 However, I have been exhausted as getting older because I had worries which I had to solve every moment. 
>>> CORRECT
I realized that being an adult didn't make me happy and I have regretted to my life time in teenagers.
>>> I realized that being an adult doesn't make me happy and I have regretted my life during my teenagers time.
 In regard to the physical appearance, human usually looks ugly as getting old. 
>>>  With regards to the physical appearance, human usually looks ugly as they get older. 
Nobody want to be ugly so many people try to keep their skin, body shape by doing exercise and so on.
>>> Nobody wants to be ugly so many people try to keep their skin, body shape by doing exercise and so on.
 Some people go to the hospital to maintain their appearance. 
>>> CORRECT
On the other hand, people work out for their healthy life and can get benefit from it.
>>> CORRECT
 We can see some people who work out a lot and look younger than their same age people. 
>>>  We can see some people who work out a lot and look younger than people in their age.
I think that it has a lot of positive aspects...
>>> CORRECT
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