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My best hero

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I had stereotype that hero is must be a person who have great achievements. However after the class, I think that my parents are my heros. Most of people think that a person who have awsome achievements seems great. Of course, I agree that, but I think my parent are the best in all around the world. From now on, my parents are my best hero and my hero will never be changed forever! I haven¡¯t think about this topic, so I think I have meaningful time for a while.

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Hi, A-Rim! Thank you so much for sharing about this. This is heartwarming. I am sure your parents would be so glad to hear that you consider them as your heroes!
~ Teacher Marie
 

I had stereotype that hero is must be a person who have great achievements.

>> I had stereotyped that a hero must be a person who has great achievements.

However after the class, I think that my parents are my heros.

>> However, after the class, I thought my parents are my heroes.

OR: However, after the class, I realized that my parents are my heroes.

Most of people think that a person who have awsome achievements seems great.

>> Most people think that a person who has awesome achievements is great.

Of course, I agree that, but I think my parent are the best in all around the world.

>> Of course I agree with that, but I think my parents are the best in the world.

From now on, my parents are my best hero and my hero will never be changed forever!

>> From now on, my parents are my heroes and that will never ever change!

I haven¡¯t think about this topic, so I think I have meaningful time for a while.

>> I haven't thought about this before, so I think I had a meaningful time thinking for a while.

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