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The reason people is addicted SNS

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2021-02-18 1272

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there are many SNS in the world.
It is not difficult to find some place to update our dailylife.
Many people follow and look for someone's SNS, and also want to share it.

I think after Covid 19, we use more SNS than before.
because maybe people feel more lonely.

I think human beings are very sociable existence.
human being cannot live alone. we have to share and communicate one another.
So the SNS is in fashin nowadays.
And also there are a lot of useful information regarding health or knowledge about something,

But if you use too much of it, it won't be good for your mindset.
because we are likely to compare with what we see eventhough we are great enough to be ourselves.
So, eventhough it is good enough, it isn't good if we abuse much of it.

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Thank you Juliet!
~Lucy

There are many SNS in the world.
>>CORRECT!
It is not difficult to find some place to update our daily life.
>>CORRECT!
Many people follow and look for someone's SNS, and also want to share it.
>>CORRECT!
I think after Covid 19, we use more SNS than before.
>>CORRECT!
because maybe people feel more lonely.
>>CORRECT!
I think human beings are very sociable existence.
>>I think human beings have very sociable existence.
human being cannot live alone.
>Human beings cannot live alone.
 we have to share and communicate one another.
>> We have to share and communicate with one another.
So the SNS is in fashin nowadays.
>>So the SNS is in fashion nowadays.
And also there are a lot of useful information regarding health or knowledge about something,
>>CORRECT!
But if you use too much of it, it won't be good for your mindset.
>>CORRECT!
because we are likely to compare with what we see eventhough we are great enough to be ourselves.
>>Because we are likely to compare with what we see even though we are great enough to be ourselves.
So, eventhough it is good enough, it isn't good if we abuse much of it.
>>So, even though it is good enough, it isn't good if we abuse much of it.

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