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Why do you think that there are a lot of people who like to go on a diet?

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I think there are a lot of people who like to go on a diet because they think they are fat.
However, many of Korean say they will go on a diet, but still they eat a lot and not exercising.

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Why do you think that there are a lot of people who like to go on a diet?

I think there are a lot of people who like to go on a diet because they think they are fat.
>>> CORRECT

However, many of Korean say they will go on a diet, but still they eat a lot and not exercising.
>>> However, many Koreans say they will go on a diet, but still, they eat a lot and they don't exercise.
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