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The worst holidays

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Usually, We do not work end of year from Christmas to first day of new year. I go to see a beach or climb a mountain in that period. I organize the year, and I get ready for the new year in that period. We also didn't work end of last year. But, I couldn't go anywhere. I stayed all that time at home. My family had dinner together but mood was so different. When I was younger than now, I hadn't recognized that visiting somewhere is very important for me especially end of years. I am going to middle age of my life. I think that every moments are more important than before. I want to do what I love to do as often as I can. Please somebody get rid of COVID-19 now.
After COVID-19, every holidays are worst.

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Hello Il Hwan,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

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Usually, We do not work end of year from Christmas to first day of new year.
>>> Usually, We do not work at the end of the year from Christmas to the first day of the New Year.

I go to see a beach or climb a mountain in that period. 
>>> CORRECT 

I organize the year, and I get ready for the new year in that period. 
>>> I organize the ending year, and I get ready for the new year in that period. 

We also didn't work end of last year. But, I couldn't go anywhere. 
>>> We also didn't work at the end of last year but, I couldn't go anywhere. 

I stayed all that time at home. 
>>> CORRECT 

My family had dinner together but mood was so different. 
>>> My family had dinner together but the mood was so different.

When I was younger than now, I hadn't recognized that visiting somewhere is very important for me especially end of years. 
>>> When I was younger, I hadn't recognized that visiting somewhere is very important for me especially at the end of the year. 

I am going to middle age of my life. I think that every moments are more important than before. 
>>> I am getting old not getting younger so I think that every moment is more important than before. 

I want to do what I love to do as often as I can. 
>>> CORRECT

Please somebody get rid of COVID-19 now.
>>> Please can somebody get rid of COVID-19 now.

After COVID-19, every holidays are worst.
>>> During COVID-19, every holiday is the worst.
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