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What are the advantages/disadvantages of taking risks?
-> The advantages of taking risks is if we take risks and succeed in something, we feel proud of our selves.
Also we can get a confidence of doing something because of taking risks.
The disadvantages of taking risks is if we take risks and fail in something, we feel sad and regret.
Also we can get afraid of doing something because we fail in something that we take risks.

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The advantages of taking risks is if we take risks and succeed in something, we feel proud of our selves.
>>The advantages of taking risks is that when we take risks and succeed in it, we feel proud of ourselves. 

Also we can get a confidence of doing something because of taking risks.
>> We can get confidence from it as well. 

The disadvantages of taking risks is if we take risks and fail in something, we feel sad and regret.
>>The disadvantages is that when it fails, we feel sad and regretful. 

Also we can get afraid of doing something because we fail in something that we take risks.
>> We also get afraid of doing something because we failed in it the first time. 
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