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I think that people are the existences who want to realize( come true) themselves.
We identify it through SNS which they post their lives on.
and if we don't have others who communicate, we can easily get diseases like mental depression.

Through our lives, we experience hardships like problems of relationship in worksite, school or even close acquaintance.
then, we exchange our help with friends.
I think the difference between friends and just acquaintances depends on "free", that is "not paying"
we don't give friends much money because we receive help from them
and we don't also pay them to make them help me.

I think the real relationship is here.
If our society doesn't have a friend, it would be colder and I'd like not to live the life
So I am very thankful for having friends.

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I think that people are the existences who want to realize( come true) themselves.
>>> CORRECT
We identify it through SNS which they post their lives on.
>>> CORRECT
and if we don't have others who communicate, we can easily get diseases like mental depression.
>>> And if we don't communicate with others, we can easily get diseases like mental depression.
Through our lives, we experience hardships like problems of relationship in worksite, school or even close acquaintance.
>>> Through our lives, we experience hardships like problems of relationships in the worksite, school or even close acquaintance.
then, we exchange our help with friends.
>>> Then, we exchange our help with friends.
I think the difference between friends and just acquaintances depends on "free", that is "not paying"
>>> I think the difference between friends and just acquaintances depends on  the help that they did it for free. 
we don't give friends much money because we receive help from them
>>> We don't give much money to our friends because we receive help for free. 
and we don't also pay them to make them help me.
>>> And we don't pay them to help us. 
I think the real relationship is here.
>>> I think that's the real relationship. 
If our society doesn't have a friend, it would be colder and I'd like not to live the life
>>> If our society is not friendly, it would be colder and I don't like to live anymore. 
So I am very thankful for having friends.
>>> CORRECT
>>>OR: So, I'm very thankful to have my friends. 
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