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It is really important to consider other people's opinions in social life.
Because humans is social animals.
Therefore we have to accept and consider others opinions and situations.
However that doesn't mean to certainly follow others opinions when we decide on anything.
After listening and discussing enough, and then it is right to decide.

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Hi Eun Ha!
It's nice to read your work again.
It has been a while.
I have missed how you express yourself.
Hope to read more from you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
It is really important to consider other people's opinions in social life.
>> It is really important to consider other people's opinions in our social lives.
Because humans is social animals.
>> It's because humans are social animals.
Therefore we have to accept and consider others opinions and situations.
>> Therefore, we have to accept and consider others' opinions and situations.
However that doesn't mean to certainly follow others opinions when we decide on anything.
>> However, that doesn't mean to certainly follow others' opinions when we decide on something.
After listening and discussing enough, and then it is right to decide.
>> After enough listening and discussions, then, it would be right to decide.
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