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I think that the education system can assist people to prepare for wok or finding job, but that is not all for that. The education system is the most basic course to prepare for the work or job. But the biggest and the most important thing is experience of the work and job throughout long time. Nevertheless, majoring a subject connected the work is helpful for a person completely.

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Hey, Ju Yeong. Good job with your homework. You did well and I appreciate you finding the time to do it. Education is very important when finding a job, that's true. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this topic. Have a good evening. ~Teacher Jane c",)


I think that the education system can assist people to prepare for wok or finding job, but that is not all for that.
>> I think that the education system can assist people to prepare for work or finding a job, but that is not all for that.

The education system is the most basic course to prepare for the work or job.
>> The education system is the most basic course to prepare for work or a job.

But the biggest and the most important thing is experience of the work and job throughout long time.
>> But the biggest and the most important thing is getting work experience and job throughout a long time.

Nevertheless, majoring a subject connected the work is helpful for a person completely.
>> Nevertheless, majoring in a subject connected to one's work is helpful for a person completely.
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