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If you do what you want to do and think positively you will feel happy and take responsibility for happiness.
However, they can not think positively if they are stressed of outside and do not well.
That's why I think there external factors that affect one's happiness.
There are external factors that affect happiness, but it is also important to rhink positively and feel responsible for happiness.

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Good morning EDEN~! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework! ^^Tuesday is a good day to reflect on the types of thoughts you are feeding your mind each day! Have a good one~! See you! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
If you do what you want to do and think positively you will feel happy and take responsibility for happiness.
>>>CORRECT
However, they can not think positively if they are stressed of outside and do not well.
>>> However, they cannot think positively if they are stressed.
That's why I think there external factors that affect one's happiness.
>>> That's why I think their external factors affect their happiness.
There are external factors that affect happiness, but it is also important to think positively and be responsible for happiness.
>>>CORRECT
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