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How long do you want to live?
-I want to live short time. about..60 years old?
Who is the oldest person you know?
-my grandmother.
How is their view of the world different than yours?
-they have a lot of wrinkle. and almost old people are small voice than younger people.

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Hi, Hazel!
Thank you for responding. Be mindful of the capitalizations in your sentences. Make sure to write the first letter of the first words in your sentences in capital letters. Well done!^^
~Elica~
How long do you want to live?
>>CORRECT
-I want to live short time. about..60 years old?
>>I want to live for a short time, maybe until about 60 years old.
Who is the oldest person you know?
>>CORRECT
-my grandmother.
>>My grandmother.
How is their view of the world different than yours?
>>CORRECT
-they have a lot of wrinkle. and almost old people are small voice than younger people.
>>They have a lot of wrinkles and I almost all of the old people have smaller voices than the younger people. 

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