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What part of your childhood would you remember the most?
-> I want to remember my friends of my childhood the most.
First, I did lots of activities and I'll do lots of activities with my friends.
Second, I did great in my school and I'll do great in my school with my friends.
So I want to remember my friends of my childhood the most.

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Hi John! Awww, that's sweet that your friends are the ones that you're going to remember the most. Anyways, thank you for sharing your experience. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

I want to remember my friends of my childhood the most.
>> I will remember my childhood friends the most. 

First, I did lots of activities and I'll do lots of activities with my friends.
>> I did and will do a lot of activities with my friends. 

Second, I did great in my school and I'll do great in my school with my friends.
>> I do great in school and so do my friends.

So I want to remember my friends of my childhood the most.
>> So, I will remember my childhood friends the most. 
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