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Because of high-speedy public transportation and globalization, people feel free to travel not only domestic places, but also foreign countries. It is true that some people argue on downsides of prodigious tourists in terms of environment and dwellers. However, I believe that international tourism has brought more benefits for couple of reasons. This essay is going to describe about it.
To start with, some citizens complain about environmental damage because of foreigners. For example, one of the most famous cities in Korea, Jeju island, suffer from dealing with tons of garbage dumped by tourists. So, the city government has been on construction of high qualified incinerator to handle it. That means residents have to pay more taxes because of not them but tourists. Another problem is continuous interference of their own living areas especially provided they live in traditional houses. Many tourists are trying to look into the house since they are curious about the inside of the build-

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Hello there Charles!

You have very well organized facts and very good arguments here on your essay. My comment will also be continued on the next part.

Thanks for taking time to answer the homework IELTS question!

-T. Donna =)

Because of high-speedy public transportation and globalization, people feel free to travel not only domestic places, but also foreign countries. 
>> Because of high-speedy public transportation and globalization, people feel free to travel not only in domestic places, but also foreign countries. 

It is true that some people argue on downsides of prodigious tourists in terms of environment and dwellers. However, I believe that international tourism has brought more benefits for couple of reasons. This essay is going to describe about it.
>> It is true that some people argue on the downsides of prodigious tourists in terms of the environment and the dwellers. However, I believe that international tourism has brought more benefits for a couple of reasons. This essay is going to describe about them.

To start with, some citizens complain about environmental damage because of foreigners. 
>> Correct!

For example, one of the most famous cities in Korea, Jeju island, suffer from dealing with tons of garbage dumped by tourists. 
>> Correct!

So, the city government has been on construction of high qualified incinerator to handle it. 
>> Correct!

That means residents have to pay more taxes because of not them but tourists. 
>> That means residents have to pay more taxes not them but for the tourists. 

Another problem is continuous interference of their own living areas especially provided they live in traditional houses. 
>> Another problem is the continuous interference of their own living areas especially the traditional houses. 

Many tourists are trying to look into the house since they are curious about the inside of the build-
>> Correct!
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