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The part of my childhood that I remember the most

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I remember the time that I stayed at the Philippines the most. I was 11years old and I had a lot of experience and I really like the memories I masde. I became independent person after I came back to Korea. Until now, I really miss those days.

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Hi Heidi! Awww, that sounds nice.  Not everyone is given the chance to study abroad. You really should cherish those moments. ^^ Anyways, thank you for sharing your experience. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

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I remember the time that I stayed at the Philippines the most. 
>> I will remember the time that I stayed in the Philippines the most. 

I was 11years old and I had a lot of experience and I really like the memories I masde. 
>> I was 11 years old. I had a lot of experiences and I really like the memories I made there. 

I became independent person after I came back to Korea. 
>> I became an independent person after I came back to Korea. 

Until now, I really miss those days
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