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What food makes you feel at home and why is it special?
-> Kimchi make me feel at home.
First, Most of the time when I am eating rice at home, I eat Kimchi.
Second, we make Kimchi our selves, and I think our Kimchi is delicious.
That's why Kimchi make me feel at home.

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Hi John! Wow! That sounds delicious. I wish I could also have a taste of your homemade kimchi. Anyways, thank you for sharing. 
 Anyways, thank you for sharing your experience. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

Kimchi make me feel at home.
>> Kimchi makes me feel at home.

First, Most of the time when I am eating rice at home, I eat Kimchi.
>> Most of the time that I eat rice at home, I eat kimchi as well.

Second, we make Kimchi our selves, and I think our Kimchi is delicious.
>> We make kimchi ourselves and it's very delicious. 

That's why Kimchi make me feel at home.
>> That's why kimchi makes me feel at home. 
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