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The food makes me feel at home

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The food makes me feel at home is tteokbokki. It tastes spicy so it makes me feel better. I always craving for tteokbbokki when I¡¯m stressed. It has high calorie so I have to endure when I¡¯m on a diet. I think I can¡¯t succeed my diet because of that.

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Hi Heidi! Wow! That sounds delicious. I wish I could also tteokbokki. I have been dreaming of trying it somedays because most of my student recommend it to me. Anyways, thank you for sharing. 

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The food makes me feel at home is tteokbokki. 
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It tastes spicy so it makes me feel better. 
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I always craving for tteokbbokki when I¡¯m stressed. 
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It has high calorie so I have to endure when I¡¯m on a diet. 
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I think I can¡¯t succeed my diet because of that.
>> I think I can't be successful on my diet because of it. 
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